March 3, 2010 – 6:59 pm
Excerpted from Business of Freelance Writing: How to Develop Article Ideas and Sell Them to Newspapers and Magazines
Rather than having a “who, what, where, when and why” (W5) lead that delivers the news, the feature article lead is meant to draw the reader into a longer, more leisurely (sometimes contentious) look at a subject, person, or event. The lead may focus on a scenario, a person or a detailed retelling of an event. It may pose questions. It may be blunt; it may be obscure. But it holds a promise that all will be revealed.
Unlike news articles that often peter out towards the end, feature articles have defined beginnings (lead), middles (body), and ends (conclusion). The longer, more leisurely lead is a staple of feature writing for magazines. The middle builds on the opening, putting flesh on the bones of the themes or characters introduced in the lead. And the end often reflects or echoes the beginning of the article, as you will see below.
Sample Feature Lead
Kevin Huber can differentiate between intense light and dark shadows. Other than that, he sees nothing. Legally blind since birth, Kevin can navigate through his word processing package as fast as any computer user I’ve seen.
Kevin, 38, has his Masters in Science from Guelph University and works as a client support representative for Microcomputer Science Centre in Mississauga where he tests computer systems and software intended for use by visually challenged persons, and shows instructors how to train disabled persons on computers.
While he cannot see the keys, he can touch type on his standard keyboard. And while he cannot see his computer screen, he hears what others see thanks to his IBM Screen Reader and speech synthesizer – two tools that translate visual information into audible information.
Kevin’s dark, deep-set eyes almost twinkle when I ask him if he can imagine life without computers. “I don’t have to imagine it. I lived it,” he says and he vividly recalls his university days when typing a 500-word essay was a chore.
Kevin is one of many physically disabled persons who successfully use adaptive technology to adjust to their particular challenge.
This is where the lead ends. Notice the shift in tone as the body of the article, another 1,500 words, begins with a nut ‘graph (what the article is about in a nutshell or in one paragraph or ‘graph). Somewhat like a W5 news lead, the nut graph – the story in a nutshell – focuses the reader’s attention on the topic or issue on which the article is focused. (I find it also helps get the writer focused.)
So here is what the lead leads the reader to:
As slanted sidewalks, or curb cuts, are used to make streets more accessible to mobility challenged persons, adaptive technology, or electronic curb cuts, are used to make computers more accessible to physically challenged persons.
Physical challenges can be divided into three categories – visual, hearing, and mobility. Visual challenges range from reduced visual acuity to blindness. Hearing challenges range from slight loss of hearing to deafness. And mobility challenges range from impaired movement of limbs to limited movement of the head and lips…
So why start with Kevin rather than curb cuts?
As its name implies, the human-interest lead attempts to draw readers into the article by making them interested in the human aspects of the issues. Notice how it doesn’t just name a person, Kevin, but tries to paint a portrait of Kevin by focusing on his ability, disability, age, educational background and even his eyes. Appropriate for an article that opens with a blind person, no?
The body of the article is rather straightforward. It builds on “Physical challenges can be divided into three categories – visual, hearing, and mobility” by detailing the technology available to help those with the challenges outlined. But who reappears at the end of the article? Kevin.
While advances in adaptive technology make computers more accessible for the disabled, access can still be a difficult and frustrating experience. Kevin Huber knows that first hand. But while he sometimes lags behind non-disabled computer users when learning new programs, he is not afraid to play with the new programs.
“I get into a lot of trouble others don’t get into, but I learn more too.”
Huber’s advice to anybody thinking about entering the world of computers? “Embrace it with an open mind,” he says because computers enable the disabled to participate in learning and employment experiences that may otherwise be closed to them.
If the article were a profile focused solely on Kevin and his accomplishments, he would not have disappeared. But the article was meant to provide a service – to inform physically challenged individuals and their employers of the computer “curb cut” options available.
Kevin reappears to complete the circle: to connect the end of the story with its beginning. It is the payoff, the reward so to speak, for the reader. It makes the reader say, “Oh yeah, I remember why I started reading this.” By closing the circle and bringing the reader back to the beginning, it makes the reader feel good or helps reinforce what the reader has learned.
To deny the reader that moment is, in my opinion, to deny the purpose of writing. And yet, to overplay it is to hit the reader over the head with a sledgehammer and deny him or her a moment of self-enlightenment.
If all this sounds manipulative, it is. You are writing. It is a conscious act. You choose the words, sentences and paragraphs. You choose what information to put in, and what not to put in. When to quote, when to paraphrase and when to ignore what somebody has told you. You choose where to start and how to end your article.
If it seems obviously manipulative, you may lose your reader. Your goal, then, is to do it without making a manipulative process seem as if it is a manipulative process.
Although it may sound like walking a tightrope, the more you read and analyze and the more you write, the more natural it becomes and feels. I was tempted to say ‘the easier it becomes’ but it’s never easy. If it became easy then everybody would do it. But it is, for me, always fun. Well, almost…
Excerpted from Business of Freelance Writing: How to Develop Article Ideas and Sell Them to Newspapers and Magazines
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